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    dots Submission Name: Skin and Scapuladots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSkin and Scapuladots
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    You found a new world
    in the crevasse between
    skin
    and scapula,

    pressed your lips there
    to taste the foreign wind,
    trailed soft fingerpads
    along the edges of unseen suns.

    I giggled,
    told you improv stories
    about the holy emperors
    Coracoid and Acromion
    swathed in stiff white robes,
    about the gentle Princess Fossa
    and her noble Prince Glenoid

    and morning drifted quietly in,
    gray and peaceful
    as together we explored
    the neighboring lands
    and formed beautiful alliances

    before sailing
    into golden sleep.




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      This is beautiful. I've read it a few times and I really don't think I have anything bad to say about it. I've decided I like that you make me look up stuff when I read your writing :) Instead of shrugging it off, I get to know what you meant and it makes it hundreds of times better.

    and morning drifted quietly in,
    gray and peaceful
    as together we explored
    the neighboring lands
    and formed beautiful alliances

    before sailing
    into golden sleep


    This is perhaps my favorite part... But it's hard not to quote this whole piece.

    I especially love the morning bit (and hell, the beautiful alliances bit too)... A summer sunrise; it's way too early, but you were up anyway. It's dewy and cold but you can see the sun and there aren't any clouds upon the horizon. You can hear the birds...

    Thanks for sharing :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-20 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]


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