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    dots Submission Name: Assumed Deaddots

    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsAssumed Deaddots

    A suction into the hidden
    Roaming around was strongly fobidden
    Memories cross over from forgotten
    Can't hide the mold when it's already rotten
    Pictures of the the past can sing so loud
    An echo to make any mountain proud
    Hands are only useful when they're used to grip
    What good are they when they always slip?
    Its' easy to close the door and turn around
    But demons still knock with that deafening sound

    Time doesn't wait while this mind grows old
    Can't get back those days that I sold
    The deeper I crawl into my own head
    The more demons awake that I assumed dead

    I'm packing more amo cause I'm headed to war
    Can't let them win as they did before
    Different is the answer to the same old thing
    Gotta learn to talk before I can sing
    Keep it together cause they feed off the broken
    Gotta breathe steady or I'll end up chokin
    Bandaging thoughts just to get through the hour
    Can't feed the flames that give them the power
    Afraid to face this enemy that lies within
    Immortal is alive in the heart of my sin

    Time remains rapid as these tears drip slow
    Looking to send these demons back down below
    Afraid to close my eyes as I lie awake in bed
    Restless are the demons that I assumed dead

    Submitted on 2007-08-13 14:28:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you rhyme realy well, it flows realy good too, but my gawd i feel depressed now, ive read a few of your other writes too, they all seem pretty dark.

    sk x
    | Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]

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