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    dots Submission Name: my darling honeyed tonguedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsmy darling honeyed tonguedots
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    could you hush now
    my travelled heart
    which in the swelling night
    calls out to your eccentric company?

    could you be lithe & intricate
    next to my dreaming body warmth,
    vested in memories we've yet to tap
    & unexpecting of the perpetual beauty
    of a returning smile?

    Is it possible
    that time could not delete us?

    Is it possible
    that when the poems appear in my mouth,
    or through my flowing autumn fingers,
    that they would find their way
    to an ever-deserving & appreciating ear?

    Or that they could even, perhaps,
    find their way into your own mouth
    whispered there by my darling honeyed tongue?

    In these restless hours i lye awake
    & form these questions
    where your body could be sleeping
    & wonder
    whether the same uneasy distance
    sets your mind to think of me
    as the moon above me
    opens yet another night
    without you...




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