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Author:	secret kisses
ASL Info:	22/f/uk
Elite Ratio:	2.81 - 558 /438 /138
Words:	143

Class/Type:	Poetry /Serious
Total Views:	1207
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	795

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unpack it

how did it ever come to this,
it only started with one little diss,
now we have broken parts all over the floor,
and bags packed ready to walk out of the door.

i didnt mean to say all the things i said,
i just wanted to get inside your head,
knowing you have a lot on your mind,
i felt forgotten and left way behind.

so to get you to notice me once again,
i had to load up on your back even more strain,
i just didnt know when enough was enough,
it sort of gave me thrills to watch you wind up.

but i didnt mean to burst our banks,
and bring on raging battles with army tanks,
so im sorry for the way i acted,
bring in ur back and unpack it x

Submitted on 2007-08-13 15:59:51 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Loved this !!!! The rhyming was perfect and it made O so much since.......smiles

really loved the lines

"but i didnt mean to burst our banks,
and bring on raging battles with army tanks,
so im sorry for the way i acted,
bring in ur back and unpack it x"

Made me smile.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley Frost

| Posted on 2009-02-07 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]

This was a good poem. Sort of simple but that's ok. The point got through and it had a lot of emotion. The ending was my favorite part. Good job!

| Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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