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    dots Submission Name: My Decemberdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 728
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    Description:
       My December is a song by Linkin Park, about having everything but giving it away in a second for the one you love. Its a sad song, brings tears to my eyes, just like he did.


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    I walked on clouds spelling your name
    Hidden behind eyelids and hair
    As flowers began to blossom an ivy bridge between us.
    The sweet perfume mingled with the clouds created illusions
    Behind which you hid with arrows,
    And pierced the bridge
    Along with my clouds
    And caused my heart to bleed
    So that it stood shriveled and weak; not able to mend the hole
    Time passed and the heart became over-exhausted
    The body slowly broke into pieces, caging the heart
    Untill it developed into the lava rock it is today; with a weak shriveled heart inside of it, unable still to mend your puncture.




    Submitted on 2007-08-13 16:47:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great! Loved it and the meaning was good as well.
    | Posted on 2009-09-04 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      omg that poems awesome!
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
      My December is still one of my all-time favorite songs so the title immediately caught my attention.

    As for your piece, I enjoyed it very much. Unclosed wounds are something I'm very familiar with so I was able to relate to it in a very emotional way.

    The structure flowed nicely and your words painted the picture well. There are a few spelling errors, but you know, that can easily be fixed. I enjoyed in particular, the very last line.
    "unable still to mend your puncture."

    It brings this piece to life, in my opinion, and opens the door for the true meaning behind the imagery and metaphors.

    Bravo.

    Still
    | Posted on 2007-12-25 00:00:00 | by StillimCold | [ Reply to This ]
      is this the lyrics to there song or just somethign written by you in like response to that?? either way i like it.... gotta go find that cd if its them though thats awesome
    vynom
    | Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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