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    dots Submission Name: City of Silencedots

    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCity of Silencedots

    Inspiration hangs above dust
    Lingering on plates too full
    Sulking, on the edge of sleep.
    Invisible wires extending
    as far as the eye can see
    Molding prison bars of security
    As order grins maliciously
    Playing her part as the Puppeteer
    Seconds become the rebels
    Following their own speed,
    As dust settles over everything;
    Keeping inspiration out.

    Submitted on 2007-08-13 17:04:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the way it sounds. But I can't quite seem to figure out what it's about. Possibly those that don't know what to do for themsevles, being 'inspired' follow what the leader tells them, being a 'pupetteer'?

    - Peace Out,
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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