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    dots Submission Name: Statue of lonielinessdots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 727
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this last night in my hot tub. It describes the loneliness I am going through at the moment, sdjusting to my new life. Hope you enjoy it.


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    dotsStatue of lonielinessdots
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    Alone she stands
    Silent and still
    A statue in a busy courtyard
    that no one cares to look at
    She is weathered and cracked
    the mark of neglect
    She stands unchanging
    as the world around her evolves
    It becomes a nightmare land
    Strange and isolated
    Inside she weeps
    her exterior may be stone
    a thick skin developed
    so she could not show her pain
    but inside she has a heart
    and it breaks
    the bindings wrap tightly around her
    As the frear wells up inside
    She has been uprooted
    Her new world is dark and foreboding
    The isolation is worse than before
    Day and night she finds herself longing
    Standing lonely
    cast out like a whore
    No friendly faces
    not a soul around
    She cries for hours on end
    inside her heart keeps on breaking
    all she wants
    is for it someday to mend




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