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    dots Submission Name: Feel The Alldots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 691
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1150



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       written for the Atomic 50s


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    dotsFeel The Alldots
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    one two 4 three
    saws cut into trees
    7eight nine 15
    can't you hear the voices
    oh how they sing

    all the food thats wasted
    so many animals in the glue
    the acid is fall fall falling
    and people they are sooo rude

    the factories supply
    officials they deny
    the hungry they cry oh oh oh ohh

    the old they tell stories
    of dark and scary jungles
    they run wild in the streets
    and fill up the shelters

    the people all keep going and going
    they honsetly dont care
    they've all got the products
    tested from the hares

    misery isnt company
    I dont think its swell
    were all dying
    this means were not of well

    Chorus:
    All the pain wrong
    and suffering
    come on people
    the bells will ring
    its time for a change
    we cant turn back time
    lets save the sphere
    of cobalt and lime
    If you cant feel the violence
    my friend it got you too
    Youll be dead
    Quite so cold and blue




    Submitted on 2007-08-14 16:37:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, i liked this, it is v. different and some parts made me giggle,
    thanx for sharing

    s.k x x x
    | Posted on 2007-08-14 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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