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    dots Submission Name: A Bed Of Roses (A Kyrielle)dots
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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 934
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 488



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       A Kyrielle is a old french form of writing...I liked trying it out.


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    dotsA Bed Of Roses (A Kyrielle)dots
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    We fell upon a crimson bed,
    softly scented petals of red.
    Lovers entangled in the sheets,
    suffocating the loneliness.

    We laid beneath a cobalt sky,
    staring into rose tinted eyes.
    Dewy skin glistened from the heat,
    suffocating the loneliness.

    The rose petals have all but dried,
    still, you are the thorn in my side.
    Lovers trapped in web of deceit,
    suffocating the loneliness.




    Submitted on 2007-08-14 20:31:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oooo, I like this a lot, very warm and loving in the first stanza with a great progression to the end, I very much enjoyed
    suffocating the loneliness.
    I think that that should be the title of this piece, it ties all three stanzas together beautifully, I don't have any criticism for this at all, but I would really appreciate any constructive criticism you could give me on my work, thank you
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by lynn marsters | [ Reply to This ]


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