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Author: slntfirflm
ASL Info:    26/F/CA
Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301 /331 /93
Words: 137
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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To my Love, so far away, yet so close to my heart. I miss you. just wait for me... not much longer now.


Falling away tonight
unless you're next to me.
Seems I can't breath again
you take the life right out of me.
Sleeping so lonely.

with the inner seas
the dreams of lullaby peace.
Sounds of collision
into the depths of me.

How long does this battle
Until I speak of you
only the hope
that keeps me alive.

Sleep so cold
without the pillow
of calm surroundings.
To shield me close
when I grow so alone.

with the inner seas
the dreams of lullaby peace.
Sounds of collision
into the depths of me.

This is a game
of continuing cries.
In the middle of the night
when no one is around.
To only have you lie next to me.

Collide with me.Coll

Submitted on 2007-08-14 22:34:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is good and whatever, but i don't really care much about it because it takes a lot for me to actually be like, "wow!"
so, i like the technique that you used and what not but i'm not a very big fan of love poems that scream "love poems"
do you get what i'm trying to say? hah, sorry if i'm not clear in my words.
it was unique and clever to use the term collide for this subject.
sorry, so short.

| Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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