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    dots Submission Name: Collidedots
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    Author: slntfirflm
    ASL Info:    26/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301/331/93
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 789
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 930



    Description:
       To my Love, so far away, yet so close to my heart. I miss you. just wait for me... not much longer now.


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    dotsCollidedots
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    Falling away tonight
    unless you're next to me.
    Seems I can't breath again
    you take the life right out of me.
    Sleeping so lonely.

    Collide
    with the inner seas
    the dreams of lullaby peace.
    Sounds of collision
    into the depths of me.

    How long does this battle
    continue?
    Until I speak of you
    only the hope
    that keeps me alive.

    Sleep so cold
    without the pillow
    of calm surroundings.
    To shield me close
    when I grow so alone.

    Collide
    with the inner seas
    the dreams of lullaby peace.
    Sounds of collision
    into the depths of me.

    This is a game
    of continuing cries.
    In the middle of the night
    when no one is around.
    To only have you lie next to me.

    Collide with me.Coll




    Submitted on 2007-08-14 22:34:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is good and whatever, but i don't really care much about it because it takes a lot for me to actually be like, "wow!"
    so, i like the technique that you used and what not but i'm not a very big fan of love poems that scream "love poems"
    do you get what i'm trying to say? hah, sorry if i'm not clear in my words.
    it was unique and clever to use the term collide for this subject.
    sorry, so short.
    Peace<3

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    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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