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    dots Submission Name: My recorddots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Umm well i wrote this cause like , felt like this , i could explain better but like you'll probably get it , and thanks to everyone who ever commented on anything i ever wrote , i really accreciate it alot , more than anything , thanks again


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    dotsMy recorddots
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    Silent record
    Scratching sounds cut through the air
    With every sound a rock falls
    By the hands of strangers at times
    Others by family
    And mostly by friends
    The record slowly begins cracking
    Eventually snaps
    Then just gets put back together somehow
    Silent record is all it's supposed to be
    No sound , simply there
    To occupy the time of those that feel like watching
    And when there done
    It goes silent once more
    Until it crackes once more , without it coming back together




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      This was pretty Good, I think i t could use more work on the flow and re-wording the piece a lil bit in area's to have the piece go toghther better other then that i like how u use the smybol of a record in your piece that somthing diff and the good..

    Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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