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A swirling madness Concealed by a calm surface Threatens to devour her She does not see Her eyes are mislead By the misleading tranquility Of the contemptuous sky So flauntingly high So loftily superior So exquisitely unattainable Now found so close So attainable A hand’s reach away She refuses to look Beneath it’s reflection in the water She can not see the monster He waits quietly Patiently To devour her She draws nearer He begins to lose patience Excited by her nearness She draws nearer The sky disguises the turbulence Of the monster’s excitement As its prey draws near “Closer, closer” He whispers “What sound is that?” She wonders A sense of unease creeps tentatively along her spine “Closer, closer” He whispers She gazes, still from afar, upon the water A ripple Breaks the Surface A momentary flaw in the sky’s perfect reflection “Oh!” She gasps And backs away More cautious now Her curiosity draws her nearer And the sun appears From it’s hiding among the tall oaks And the perfect orb is reflected in the water “Oh!” She gasps And draws a little nearer Mesmerized by the light She extends a hand Towards the water “Ha!” Laughs the monster And she hears… Too late |
Scaary... and yet so increddibly wonderful... Don't know why but it makes me think of a woman in an abusive relationship. I suppose it can be read in manny different ways... still love it ![]() The layout of it all makes it more interesting, just like the woman(girl) it almost lures you to keep reading. the imagery and storyline are compleatly flawless as far as I can see. just one thing... the repetiton of mislead in the second (third) stanza messes things up... makes it feel wierd if you could find a substitute for either mislead or misleading i think it would get better. It's like; I was stared at by the staring eyes, or examined by examining hands or something like that. otherwise this is one of the better things I've read for a while | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Wolfie | [ Reply to This ] | very well written <nice adjectives and the use there of>...i liked it | | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ] | |