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    dots Submission Name: Serendipity dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 519
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Serendipity

    Captivated by the sky, I am impassioned,
    Wrapped in pure ecstasy.
    As the stars emitted rays of sinless beauty.
    Showering the sky, I am fervent.

    Aroused by the beauty, my face luminous,
    Seduced by the artistry.
    My flesh, it glistens, as the air becomes sultry.
    Kissed by the breeze, I quiver.

    Engulfed by the moon, my body tenses,
    Pleasured by its vitality
    Euphoria engulfs me, and I will yearn fiercely.
    As the moon escapes from me.

    Subdued by the beauty, I will wait.
    Night is my passion.
    Lying beneath it vastness, a lost maiden.
    Desirous for more luscious beauty.




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      I like you poem, a delightful dream .
    I some day wish to live in you world.
    I say that because I even like the words you used. Give us more.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a delightful poem, Donna, with just enough ambiguity to give it mystery and intrigue! I am impressed that you went to the effort to properly punctuate it, and your punctuation and structure are excellent! Nice poem, and nice work!
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      its good like the way you used the words but the only problem is they are not of every day english in all it nice
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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