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    dots Submission Name: trustdots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 573



    Description:
       wow. really gay poem. lol. but it sends the right message so it did the job. Help me with it please


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    You love me and need me.
    Tell me you trust me.
    Tell me you'll tell me when youve got something on your mind.

    You say you won't leave me.
    You've said you believe me.
    Then why do I feel like the ones you've left behind?

    Please don't compare me.
    And do not judge me.
    when we've got so much to do and so little time.

    I don't mean to hurt you,
    or be a burden to you.
    but don't lie to me and say that you are fine.






    Submitted on 2007-08-16 03:32:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem!

    I don't think anything needs to change about it!

    It's perfect just the way it is!

    Good job, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      I can tell you care, but you seem to be pleading
    when you need to get on their nerves in a good way by taking out the first two lines of the last stanza. and change the ending.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Good,it could have been better if you defined your message.then we can say; something like this happened, that is why you dont trust or the outcome of trust.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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