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    dots Submission Name: Another Cursedots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 617/549/200
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 147
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1399



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    dotsAnother Cursedots
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    I say Goodbye
    Alone, walk away
    I think I've reached
    the end;
    so long my sweet
    memories
    for you my heart
    I May mend?

    A glimpse of the future
    taste of the past
    another window closing
    the doors shutting fast!
    I see it all
    in a shadows dream
    don't ask why
    you Needn't weep for me!

    It's All tainted
    It's all wrong
    to love possabilites
    that be foregone
    I tell you All
    it's a Tragic dream
    to live this life
    in a memory

    A glimpse of the future
    taste of the past
    another door closing
    the windows shutting fast!
    I see it all
    in a shadows dream
    don't ask why
    you Needn't weep for me!

    So take me down
    and take my word
    it's all true
    it's all absurd
    It's all true
    that it's all wrong
    my memories
    lost and forgone

    A glimpse of the future
    taste of the past
    another window closing
    the doors shutting fast!
    I see it all
    in a shadows dream
    don't ask why
    you Needn't weep for me!

    Another line.
    Another verse..
    Another blessing
    Another curse...




    Submitted on 2007-08-16 18:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ST 3, ln 3


    it's spelled "possibilities"


    (spelling and such is a pet peeve of mine =] )


    This was nice, i like the flow.

    Actually, it's very song-esque with the repeating stanzas and such.


    ahh, i keep being interrupted-sry the comment wasn't better but i have to go.


    i enjoy your style =]

    +Moz+
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow
    I go away for a bit
    and you didn't become all cheery...
    no shock there :P
    nah, this was pretty
    but it was a little more tragic than I'm used to from you, what's up with that? are you okay??
    I really missed you
    and your writing,
    sorry you're in so much pain,
    sorry it's hard to say what'd make you happy *right* now.

    Nice write,
    not your best by any means
    but not your worst either.

    much love && peace,
    -jessie
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have really grown in aspects of your writing & although I've always enjoyed many of your pieces I feel your latest pieces are very therapeutic.

    In the NOW...

    Right on!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Ambivalent life, the hopelessness of yesterday is the hope of today and the obsession of tomorrow.

    "it's all true / it's all absurd" ... it is the mind that gives and takes meaning, ... and a human's mind is his only curse :)
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]


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