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    dots Submission Name: A Study on Lovedots
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    Author: Atropos
    ASL Info:    15/Male/Marietta
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 35/56/20
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       A rough draft. Tear it apart please, if you feel that way toward it. I was doing my homework, listening to The Decemberists (Crane Wife 1 and 2, to be specific) And I had no choice but to stop in the middle of my essay and write this.


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    dotsA Study on Lovedots
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    Call me crazy.
    Seeing your face,
    It almost brings tears.
    Seeing such grace
    I could never find another
    So agitated,
    So frustrated,
    With life;
    And yet capable
    Of making others feel content with it.
    Your smile could melt my thoughts
    All I could do is smile back.
    Because when I see you
    There are no worries.
    There’s nothing else in the world.
    I forget my stress
    I know now how it feels
    A love that inspires poems,
    Hackneyed yet heartfelt each time.
    I was never the toughest person,
    But even if I were,
    Just thinking of you
    Still merits a tear of gratefulness.




    Submitted on 2007-08-16 18:48:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a nice tribute to your obvious paramore and in that respect I pat you on the back and say go forward and pursue real love. As for the piece, I do beleive that the punctuation in this piece is pretty scattershot and it does nothing to enhance the read. Re-read it yourself and see if you don't agree.
    | Posted on 2007-08-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]



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