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    dots Submission Name: Awaiting Morningdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 790
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 787



    Description:
       i havent written in awhile, but let me know what u think


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    dotsAwaiting Morningdots
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    head splitting darkness filling
    consuming my world this empty feeling
    burn in my throat slowly killing
    pouring past all insanity
    the end of glass, my only family
    quickly taking over my world
    my fault, your fault
    who cares anymore
    I lie here dying inside
    trying to get by
    while u hold my hand with screams and cries
    liquid pain getting me through the night
    getting me through the days
    helping me swallow the pain
    awaiting morning
    pushing through the rain
    the sun comes up and begins the day
    trying to rebuy what i cant replace
    awaking from my daze in a familiar place
    the light burns and the pain sets in
    awaiting morning
    to pay for my sin




    Submitted on 2007-08-17 05:50:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice.i digg the end.

    and the part when u wrote my fault ur fault who cares anymore..


    yah good poem .


    peace

    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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