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    dots Submission Name: ~Secret Society~dots

    Author: -Lith-Ium-
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 56/107/58
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       The Path To Heaven Is Through Hell.

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    dots~Secret Society~dots

    There was a note of dreams in white,
    There for the readers last delight,
    And on the canva's carmine night
    In coral red I sit and write...

    ...about the dreams I used to dream,
    About the darkness and its gleam,
    About some roses which redeem,
    A spirit lost in ocean's stream.

    ...about the shadows within light,
    About the pale amaranth sight
    That guides my eyes, maybe in spite
    Of reason, beyond wrong or right.

    ...I think a secret was the theme,
    But rather I will not blaspheme.
    I'll leave a single star agleam
    And to the reader my esteem.

    Submitted on 2007-08-17 09:24:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have expressed some interesting viewpoints in this piece and I would not think to engage in debate over any of them.

    In the 3rd line of the 3rd stanza you would be well served to change "inspite" to read "in spite".

    Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us here.
    | Posted on 2007-08-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece was very engaging from start to end...or the not so end

    I enjoy how you muse riddle & rh7ym3e.


    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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