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    dots Submission Name: Richmonddots
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    Author: Imaginth
    Elite Ratio:    5.18 - 43/50/19
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 925
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 759



    Description:
       Basically I know the rythems are off, but this was just me trying to concentrate with a bunch of guys editing my work over my shoulder in an extremely cramped car. -.-'


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    dotsRichmonddots
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    Right here in Richmond.
    I'll be waiting for you.
    With my hand out.
    Waiting for you.
    Right here in Richmond.

    We'll watch the stars all night.
    'Til the sun comes up
    under the covers we'll hide.

    Right here in Richmond.
    I'll be waiting for you.
    With my hand out.
    Waiting for you.
    Right here in Richmond.

    Let the years pass us by.
    All I need is you
    and I'll be just fine.

    Right here in Richmond.
    I'll be waiting for you.
    With my hand out.
    Waiting for you.
    Right here in Richmond.

    Right here in Richmond...
    Yeah, right here in Richmond.




    Submitted on 2007-08-17 11:21:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awws. WAIT U LIVE IN RICHMOND? I LIVE FREAKING 5MIN.!! AWAY!!!! Umm... Neways xD I liked it very much dear friend Mage. It is very catchy, its very...very...U xD. Idk xD sorrys for wasting your times xD. But i did like it, i did enjoy it, it did make me wanna write more xD. Till the day i am better!!!!! Now lookie here i will one day be the Ruler of this World. And and the elite Poets will write the poems for me xD.(MIDGET KING!!!!!!)
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Zadokya | [ Reply to This ]
      it is romantic. it is charming. it is longing. it is also repetitive, which is clearly what you were going for but personally for me it gets the message across with little subtlety. i am NOT bashing it i just think it's a little manufactured. i'm going to look at more of what you have (well i hope there's more) and feel free to criticize/comment mine too
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Alize | [ Reply to This ]
      I likey. It's romantic. It's charming and charismatic. It gives the reader an undertone of longing and love. It's great work. Keep it up!

    "Thats all."
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]


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