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    dots Submission Name: So hard not to crydots
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    Author: Magger32
    ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53/131/124
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 990
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 808



    Description:
       A girl that has tried not to cry in life.


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    dotsSo hard not to crydots
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    Child of the night and shadowy corners,
    Walk alone through the corridors.
    Pick the path of dripping blood over emotional tears.
    Hide the past as you carry on through your years.

    Lonely you hide…
    To fight off emotion.
    Drowning yourself with this potion.

    Hate the spell that cannot be broken.
    Love the charm which is never spoken.

    Would you rather speak through tears;
    Or anger’s fate?

    I would rather fight,
    Than congregate.

    Speak hatefull words…
    You know you could be said as worse.
    Worlds spill past your control.
    Tears fill your eyes.
    You’re filled with hate and selfish pride.

    It’s just so hard not to cry!!






    Submitted on 2007-08-17 16:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got the gist of your internal pain during the reading of this piece. Unfortuately I felt that you were trapped by your rhyme schem rather than helped by it. Whe rhyme sounds forced it diminishes the effect of the piece.
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very intimate & emotional piece that has much meaning!

    Yes, how hard we sometimes try to conceal our pain and beauty.

    The tears flow when ready and you will take them as droplets in your sea of self ~ ~ ~

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share= )

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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