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    dots Submission Name: Roof/ Floordots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is another prose poem from the same essay as Puddle.


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    dotsRoof/ Floordots
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    The ever-changing sky inspires me. The clouds move en masse like globs of wax in a lava lamp. The colors change at day's beginning and end as if the sun is a fiber optic Christmas light shining upon an aluminium Christmas tree.






    Submitted on 2004-02-04 00:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mm... Are there any more of these? I'd like to see them if there are. This, like puddle, reads smoothly, and appeals to me despite my usual distate for prose-poetry. I like that bit about the clouds. Nice piece! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. The words paint a beutiful image and form a complete observation without any extraneous meandering in structure or wordiness to mpress the rubes (unlike this comment).
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      this feels a little incomplete....
    i like the way its written i think it reads as one i just feel a little like you could really get some more analogies/metaphors from the subject you are addressing.....
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    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]


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