There are many reasons to pray. Every day we have more of them. And expressing them in the way you have is universal
in scope, I like that about this poem. It doesn't speak to any one issue so I can believe it's about a friend's personal tragedy,
or the insidious claiming of lives from war.
I dunno....just sounds better...feels better. Then :
of innocence in blood
can you take out the "in"...maybe...that way meaning is still there but flow is hitting harder.
Have no miracles
maybe :
There are no miracles
then this too:
a fervent plea for peace
drop the "a" for :
fervent plea for peace
and that's it...hehe
Very on cue with the thought and feeling of a race helllll bent on killing itself ...and sometimes not having the mercy to break and pause for the cause of man.
Human nature....can be oh so cruel...maybe it comes from way back, when the caves where still threated by dinos...haha
We always act first and think later...sad but true. I wish for every bleeding heart there was a cure for the pain and misery.
The way you have written this is a little more on the cut and curt side...which I think is fitting as there is no fluff and stuff when it comes to killing the good with breeding hate and evil.
You are so right about the need for prayers in these often hideous times that we find ourselves living in. I am actually glad that I am past the point of bringing anymore progeny into that madness that envelopes all of us. Perhaps with enough prayer cooler and wiser heads will find a way to stem the tide of madness.
Submission Name: Copious Shedding
