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    dots Submission Name: where the heart vibratesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 624
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotswhere the heart vibratesdots
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    it's something that she showed us.
    how to experience life like a tree
    & love like a lotus.
    so i branch out lively
    & sunburst my ever-loving love
    from its focal.

    & passion is local.
    its formed from a beat
    in the thunder perfect mind,
    unwinds down the spine
    vested warmly where the heart vibrates.
    nested in such skinly states.

    the dormant elder of my middle eye
    tries to pass the hours by
    in time with lovely melodies
    of inner storms & comedies.

    reach now,
    & be the permanent neon of autumn,
    & flash your gilly eyes if you've got'em.

    be stranger than the doors you pass
    & stranger things will come at last.
    & never get so attatched to rhythm
    that you forget that you don't have to rhyme




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      I definitely had to read that a few times, and I like it a lot. It's got some depth to it... yes... very good.
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by cwy0925 | [ Reply to This ]


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