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    dots Submission Name: Let me call your name, Sigma Bluedots

    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Unrequited love perhaps...

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    dotsLet me call your name, Sigma Bluedots

    Let me call your name,
    For you will never hear it.
    Sigma Blue,
    Sigma Blue.
    When water shatters my body,
    And my eyes,
    Behind a glassy liquid face,
    The sound of your name
    Will comfort my agony.
    The ordinary moments
    Will try to smother
    The extraordinary
    In a simple dishwashing afternoon.
    My hands will mechanically
    Touch the soap, hold the plates
    Careful, from the edges
    But there is a window by my side.
    There is a tree outside the window.
    And there is a wind.
    A foreign wind perhaps,
    Of another time, of another place.
    I must call out your name,
    Sigma blue,
    Sigma blue,
    But you will never hear it.
    There will be nothing foreign
    About this life.
    No wind,
    But earth and water.
    Dry land and liquid refuge.
    The ordinary moments
    And the in-between.
    The silenced, secret gaps
    Of life
    Requesting to hear your name.
    “Sigma blue”
    Let me call your name,
    In those in-betweens,
    This is how I still know
    You did exist.

    Submitted on 2007-08-18 21:09:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, yet another really good piece of poetry with no comments..i can't believe how many good poems go unnoticed here at ES--

    i like the idea of mechanically approaching the mundane activities in order to forget that the speaker's love is not reciprocating..not hearing when she calls his name...

    i love the dishwashing part...it is like i keep trying to wipe my feelings off the plate that is my heart...but no amount of scrubbing gets rid of the thoughts of you...

    really nice poem, Maria!
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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