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    dots Submission Name: Fallen angeldots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Trying to capture the emotion of those fallen from grace

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    dotsFallen angeldots

    Eyes affixed upon the horizon
    The pale blue moon within the night sky
    Each star a veil of my apathy
    Each shadow the undying shame beneath
    Within temptation that may beguile
    Wishing only to be forgotten
    To be left alone within disgrace

    All that is left of my testament
    Is blackened feathers and broken wings
    Pride destroyed by an indiscretion
    Unrelenting winds and sombre smiles
    Watch the waves crashing without mercy
    Helplessly thrashed beneath the surface
    Wishing only to be forgotten
    To be left alone in my disgrace

    I am but ash from the holy flame
    Cursed by an unbroken silence
    Unwanted by even the darkness
    Each word spoken the last of my rites
    Each remaining thought a broken promise
    Wishing only to be forgotten
    Taken away from my disgrace

    Submitted on 2007-08-18 21:48:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      beautiful. you show to a pain to a story from which i once drew power. we are free. it's seething with underlying strains that make this a rich and delicious piece.

    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      wow let me first say... absolutely stunning...

    I am but ash from the holy flame
    Cursed by an unbroken silence
    Unwanted by even the darkness

    this is by far the focal point i think of the write. coming from a satanic background it is easy for me to understand the words you've written here. this almost seems to me like the last words or thoughts of an epic character amist a holy batttle... anyw ay that is what i get from this.
    great write very vivid

    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by Sun | [ Reply to This ]
      the imagery of this writting is amazing. You get the point across, how it feels to be let down but to let yourself down. I enjoy it steven.

    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by _Osiris_ | [ Reply to This ]

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