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Spellbound To The Rose


Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Spellbound To The Rose



Spellbound to a person
likes hands to a prayer.
Sharing a passion as I do
for this red rose
that is written in literature
so plain! and so English!
that are written by a hand
that bear 5 fingers
so pretty! and so delicate!
as to be lush rose petals!
and a writting arm
so long !and so smooth!
as to be a flexible stem!
for my heart to admire
so deeply!
and to so deeply desire!
that one special moment
to where Life and Time,
is but a distant eternity
and I tango with
the rose of my life!!!




Submitted on 2007-08-18 21:56:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  While reading this piece I truly wanted to be convinced that it was well written and that I liked it...alas I was unsuccessful on both fronts. There are parts that make little to no sense and the misspellings detract from its beauty. I have no way of knowing how long you have been writing, if this was one of your first attempts then it's not bad and not beyond repair. If you have been writing for a while then this must have been penned on one of your down days. I am not trying to be cruel, I am just trying to give you an honest assessment.
| Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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