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    dots Submission Name: uncertaindots

    Author: sballk20
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    breathless days
    broken smiles
    shattered dreams

    i'm just searching for tomorrow ways
    everything seems to dawn down upon me
    each path leads down to another deadend

    which way am i suppose to take
    do i keep missing the signs before me
    or am i going in the right way after all

    wishing the signs could be vivid
    and not another blur to my vision

    stumbling across another trail
    my stomach churns
    wondering if itís a mislead passage
    or if if Iím expected to be there

    each passage has led me to joy
    and ended in some kind of sorrow

    I know its making me stronger within
    Yet sometimes I feel as if I cannot go on

    The happiness gives me this tingling effect
    That I never want to end

    The sorrows give me guilt inside
    Which make me wanna give up with one last goodbye

    I understand you want me to go on and be strong
    But only with your help

    Let me find the right way
    Let me feel comfort and joy
    Leave out the pain and misery for just a bit

    One day that I donít have to gasp for air,
    One day that I donít have to fake a smile,
    And just one day that my dreams donít have to be shattered,
    That is the day I am searching for

    Submitted on 2007-08-18 22:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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