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    dots Submission Name: Rubydots
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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsRubydots
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    Holding a cutted ruby up towards the night sky,
    A prefect design revealed
    except for the chips and scratches.

    The moonlight playing, running, dancing
    around and thru it, highlighting and masking
    by turns.

    A scar here, a fire there,
    a sparkle here, a chip there...
    Stories of its journey thru time,
    memories etched on...

    ~~~~~


    Memories...
    the beginning a lump of rock,
    after polished and cutting, a see-thru stone
    Useless and of no valued...
    No value, save what people give it
    A stone worked by many hands,
    Some wear it smooth, some shaped it with tools,
    some throw it away and some pass it by




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 00:41:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay, the first thing I noticed was you said "cutted," which isn't a word. But, no big deal. Second, I really didn't find anything wrong with this poem. I thought it was good. Uh.. keep up the good work.
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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