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    dots Submission Name: Crazydots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1012
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    Bytes: 459



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       Robert, this is for you. I know you probably think I am being a nit-picking cold-hearted, ego-maniacal, self-centered bitch right now, But in all honesty I am just telling you how I feel. You and I can't be together. I do love you but I can't be with you ever again, our engagement wasn't a Mistake persay, but it wasn't the best made decision either of us made. You and I both know we were never meant to be together, and that is the way that it should stay.


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    dotsCrazydots
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    Crazy, for being in love again,
    For falling over the same steps.
    Crazy, for not seeing that I can't
    Do this all over again.

    Crazy, for trying so hard,
    not to push you away.
    Crazy, For all the stupid things
    I did to you along the way.

    Crazy in every sence,
    Of the word, It's so clear and true,
    Craziest, for falling Hard-core,
    In love with someone like you!




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 08:58:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      will you quit putting it in nice words??? It was a [censored] mistake from day 1. I should have never asked you out in the first place let alone think you were nearly woman enough to marry me. You are a whore, and a lazy one to boot, so [censored] off
    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      We have all fallen victim to the same kind of craziness in our lifetimes and it hurts for a while but it does scab over and eventually heal.

    In line 1 of stanza three you might want to change "ever sence" to read "every sense". Not a big error but it does stand out.
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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