Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Graydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 932
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 231



    Description:
       I have no idea what to make of this one. I love the last three lines. I thought I'd see what others think.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsGraydots
    -------------------------------------------


    He studies clipper ships all the gray afternoon in his pomegranate kitchen.
    He is trembling in this guilty nowhere.
    The form of his sad-eyed body like an old building
    held up by snow and stars.





    Submitted on 2004-02-04 00:41:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      hrm... vacant is a good word... but that's a good thing... a little vacancy can be calming... It will be interesting to see what others make of this. I can see the picture... feels like the last three seconds of All My Children or something... Nice. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't really know what to make of it either. Nice words though, and you can feel the hint of an emotion in the setting. I don't suppose it's nescessary that it really have any meaning.
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like something is missing, built up a good base for structure and plot so with a little more thought you can have a good write, i do like the last three lines also
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by brokenbatman | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    1483

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry