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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 989
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    Bytes: 231



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       I have no idea what to make of this one. I love the last three lines. I thought I'd see what others think.


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    He studies clipper ships all the gray afternoon in his pomegranate kitchen.
    He is trembling in this guilty nowhere.
    The form of his sad-eyed body like an old building
    held up by snow and stars.





    Submitted on 2004-02-04 00:41:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hrm... vacant is a good word... but that's a good thing... a little vacancy can be calming... It will be interesting to see what others make of this. I can see the picture... feels like the last three seconds of All My Children or something... Nice. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't really know what to make of it either. Nice words though, and you can feel the hint of an emotion in the setting. I don't suppose it's nescessary that it really have any meaning.
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like something is missing, built up a good base for structure and plot so with a little more thought you can have a good write, i do like the last three lines also
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by brokenbatman | [ Reply to This ]


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