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    dots Submission Name: The Guy Who Turned Her Down (Tom Fletcher)dots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 395
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2184



    Description:
       This is a Mcfly B-Side which is dedicated to a girl on this site (she knows who she is). Sorry its another thing I didn't write


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    dotsThe Guy Who Turned Her Down (Tom Fletcher)dots
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    It hasn't been the best of days,
    Since she drove off and left me standing in a haze
    Because I've been so out of order
    Yes I have babe
    My new found love showed up and blew her out the water

    And its so not easy
    (I know she'll say)
    I'm sleazy
    (I love the way)
    You please me

    I can't believe I found
    A girl who turned my life around
    She suddenly
    Came onto me
    Pin me down
    On the ground
    I could have pushed away
    But I didn't know what she'd say
    But I'm glad I'm not the guy who turned her down

    I cut my social life in two
    I quit my city job so I can be here with you
    My friends say I'm a fool in love
    But I'm not babe
    It's worth my while because you're what my dreams are made of

    Cos you look like
    (A beauty queen)
    Sucked in by
    (Your tractor beam)
    You know I

    I can't believe I found
    A girl who turned my life around
    She suddenly
    Came onto me
    Pin me down
    On the ground
    I could have pushed away
    But I didn't know what she'd say
    But I'm glad I'm not the guy who turned her down

    Years go by
    (As the years go by)
    I wonder why
    (I start to wonder why)
    She had come to me
    (Bah da bah bah)
    So glad that she met me
    (Bah da bah bah)
    And life without you baby, just don't know where I would be

    I can't believe I found
    A girl who turned my life around
    She suddenly
    Came onto me
    Pin me down
    On the ground
    I could have pushed away
    But I didn't know what she'd say
    But I'm glad I'm not the guy who turned her down (down down down down)
    Yeah I'm glad I'm not the guy who turned her down (down down down down)
    Yeah I'm glad I'm not the guy who turned her down




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 11:27:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi, I agree somewhat with shombray, it seems a bit indifferent, it has a lot of cliché lines, but I really do like the idea of this thinking type of song I think painting your words will bring new life to your words, colors strike emotion. I would love to hear music behind this as well :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by strangestage | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really sweet poem but a little indifferent. Because it is not like your normal love poem that is what makes the poem good. It kind of seemed like a song because of these lines :
    She had come to me
    (Bah da bah bah)
    So glad that she met me
    (Bah da bah bah)
    And life without you baby, just don't know where I would be .The title of your poem is what catches the readers attention because the person will wan tot know what guy turned her down or do you mean you turned her down, Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      nice ed, makes sence and yea I should put something up on mine I have few poem like things.....
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by Sarah Black | [ Reply to This ]
      dude , this Crap?!































    j/k , it's cool man , Hope she reads it ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]


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