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Schizophrenic


Author: crimson echo
ASL Info:    21 M U.S. of A
Elite Ratio:    8 - 412 /150 /55
Words: 147
Class/Type: Lyrics /Comedy
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Average Vote:    5.0000
Bytes: 954



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And here's the long-awaited addition to that verse I put in my journal some time ago. Enjoy if you are so inclined...


Schizophrenic



1
I find myself preoccupied with the voices in my head
Caught up with what should have died but grew a soul instead
I feel it's only hopeless
Let the world go on and spiral out--
After all, I should be grateful--since now I'm never alone...

chorus

They give me ten foot clearance all around the sidewalk
and people will jump sideways as if I'm foaming at the mouth
They say I've got a room reserved at the rubberwall hotel
But I haven't lost my marbles yet--
--or at least, haven't lost them all.

2
I hide behind my shadow so I've got a place to run
Just in case you didn't know, NIMH comes for me at one--
Though why I couldn't tell you
I've only spoken what I've seen--
I fear to let them find me--yet still, I'm never alone...

chorus




Submitted on 2007-08-20 13:07:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I would say it's very relatable, but I don't think that's a good idea with this piece.

I must ask, though, how much of it is inspired by your life..?

I guess I clicked on this because I've been wanting to research schizophrenia; a girl in the neighborhood said that she might be schizophrenic, but she doesn't walk around talking to herself or twitching or anything like that. She just seems like your typical preteen growing up in a trailer park and smoking marijuana in the bushes and compulsively lying...so it got me wondering, just what is schizophrenia? I'm sure it's got to be more than the comical wacko symptoms here; some very intellegent people have had schizophrenic symptoms; like Albert Einstein.

Anyway, I've gone on about the sickness and not about your piece.

They give me ten foot clearance all around the sidewalk
and people will jump sideways as if I'm foaming at the mouth
They say I've got a room reserved at the rubberwall hotel
But I haven't lost my marbles yet--
--or at least, haven't lost them all.


The funniest part, in my opinion. I don't have any suggestions, but I wonder if you have a tune for these lyrics?

It also makes me wonder, forgive me for more philosophy, why we like so much to make fun of being crazy? I bet you wouldn't be laughing if those voices really did start clamoring...or maybe you would, I don't know.

I guess if we can laugh such at such a subject, it assures us of our own sanity...

Well, thank you for assuring me.

Peace, dude.

Jen


| Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
  But I haven't lost my marbles yet--
--or at least, haven't lost them all.



)
you have made me laugh, that is quite enough. People are staring.


Cheers
Azuire
| Posted on 2007-08-21 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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