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    dots Submission Name: Unknowingdots
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    Author: crimson echo
    ASL Info:    21 M U.S. of A
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 412/150/55
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1040



    Description:
       Imagine my surprise when, while disassembling lunch trays at work, I was hit in the face with a chorus line...

    Then imagine my boss's surprise when I proceeded to rip the flap off of a nearby cardboard box and start writing...


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    dotsUnknowingdots
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    1
    The rain is pouring down,
    a stream of tears born of the sky--
    there, blaze forth lighning: reach out for the dark.
    And I wonder if I now lie down to die.

    2
    I hear them calling now.
    Still, I fear to open up my eyes.
    They say that our fear's all that we've ever had:
    still I know, I've looked upon You as you cry.

    chorus
    Is it your forgiveness that I seek,
    or that You would break me down to the ground?
    Or some redemption of the weak,
    or for the love that we've never found?
    Can You be called upon a moment,
    to speak away the storms that You condone?
    Are you a high, uncaring spirit,
    or can I believe You when you say we're never alone?

    3
    What's lost cannot be found
    by trusting human means alone.
    Perhaps that's what I fear: all that I've ever seen
    giving way to what no mind has ever known.

    chorus




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 13:25:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ~*~

    I always liked angsty musings and spectacular images in poetry and it's safe to say that nothing has changesd. You've done an irrevocably good job here. I like the "line of thinking" tone this piece has and can't help but melting in the melancholy and serene sadness of it.

    ~*~

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    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      How inextricably sad. I enjoy Christian music on a whole, but I must mention out of all the lyrics I've looked up (and that's quite a bit, mind!) this seems to be the most questioning of all of them. The verses, sound slightly forced however, maybe I'll just need to make up some tune in my head.

    or can I believe You when you say we're never alone?

    it's such a powerful line, I think that's what stuck out to me, a searching for perhaps meaning in otherwise brief and fleeting existence. However a wise person once told me we ARE NEVER ALONE. As long as we have the voices in our heads and the Lord in our hearts, there is nothing else to be desired of the world.

    Except maybe tacos.

    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-08-21 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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