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    dots Submission Name: I'm sorry you'll never see thisdots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 347
    Class/Type: Misc/Sorry
    Total Views: 837
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       Each one of these are to my friends that have helped me so much, and that I have decieved too many times. I'm sorry


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    I'm looking back on years passed
    When we were just kids
    Innocent, Ignorant, Oblivious, Happy
    Believe me when I say that I loved that card
    That you made for me on my 8th birthday
    I'm sorry I never shared my Crayons
    With you in the 2nd grade
    I wish I could've seen you
    At your very first band concert
    I wish I could've seen your first slow dance
    I bet you looked beautiful
    I regret not being able to tell you
    That your little sister was more than just sick
    Your parents wouldn't let me
    You were right all along
    When you said I had changed
    You were wrong when you said
    That I didn't care anymore
    When we broke in to that abandoned house
    I want you to know that I was scared
    Even thoguh I acted brave and laughed at you
    And I forgive you for blaming me all those times
    I know you just needed to vent a while
    Thank you for wasting your time with me
    Just to make sure I would be okay that night
    I'm sorry I never told you my secrets
    When you poured all of yours to me
    I hope you knew that I was there for you
    Every single time you needed me
    Even though I didn't always know what to say
    I'll understand if you never forgive me
    For lying to you all those time
    And for using you just to keep
    The lies alive for the rest of the world
    I pushed you away in hopes you
    Wouldn't go down with me in the end
    I wish we could go back to being kids
    Testing the ice in the winter-time
    I would fall through and you would grab my hand
    Before I slipped under
    But I guess we're doing that now already
    One day I'll find the courage
    To tell all of you these things and more
    One day I'll look you in the eyes
    And tell the truth
    But until then, this is just practice
    An attempt of a liar practicing the truth...




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      What one could do if you could go back in time... before it was too late... a sorrowful thought indeed, but one that in this case produced a slightly nostalgic, apologetic feel. Beautiful and fragile like a cystal in an earthquake zone. The progression from childhood to teenagers to childhood again is also intriguing.

    Best wishes,
    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow..

    "But until then, this is just practice
    And attempt of a liar practicing the truth..."

    DAM... speaks so much more than the words that are typed there... dam good job! loved every bit of it. as well, I can relate

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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