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    dots Submission Name: Nothing but Still Frames and A Fading Memory....dots
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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is about someone I've only met once.


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    dotsNothing but Still Frames and A Fading Memory....dots
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    I dont even know the sound of your voice
    But if I could only hear it
    I know it would make me smile

    Your eyes bare the glance
    That could center all my energy
    Your still smile warms what's cold within me

    My strength is just a number
    And I've pulled mountains with less

    With a thought..
    With a hope..
    With a wish..

    In what deems this
    In a world of vertigo
    Through the dead sea of distance
    To whatever result to be known...

    Just be, and just know...




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 17:40:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the tone and tenor of this piece and the sincere desire to just get to know the person in that photograph. That's what I get from this, if i am wrong...so be it.
    | Posted on 2007-08-21 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this.
    I sort of reminds me of Savage Garden's 'I knew I loved you.'
    It's sweet and simply, but it has a big impact of emotion flowing all the through it.
    It does not just fall off topic or make you lose interest.
    <3 Crescent
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]


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