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    dots Submission Name: perfectdots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    At the time when we met,
    I thought you were perfect.
    You always seemed so nice
    Befriending me when others wouldnít.

    Never a bad word said about me,
    Helping me when a problem came about.
    You never seemed to have a flaw,
    Then you got a girl friend.

    Everything changed from then on,
    Now all you did was say mean things.
    Always you would pick fights,
    Never did you say you were sorry.

    After one fight you left,
    And still I have not heard from you.
    Iím tired of wondering what I did,
    Iím tired of crying.

    All the mean things ring in my head,
    You accused me of being jealous,
    You said what ever you could to hurt me.
    You went as far as saying Iím ugly.

    With all your words and actions
    I begin to wonder how I thought,
    That you were ever perfect,
    When I see now that your not.

    What once seemed so perfect,
    Now seems so wrong.
    Your not who I thought,
    How could I be so wrong?

    The idea of perfect
    Now seems so far away.
    No longer do I see us together,
    No longer do I wish to be noticed.

    The most perfect thing now,
    Would be for you to forget me,
    So that I could move on in peace.
    Not hearing your words everyday.

    Without seeing you everyday,
    I think I could move on from you,
    A life without you or heartbreak
    Is now my vision of perfect.

    Now when I think perfect
    It has nothing to do with you,
    And everything to do with me
    A life free of you is my perfect world.




    Submitted on 2007-08-20 21:22:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm, interesting. Your stanzas are nice my dear, but your words aren't conclusive. If it has nothing to do w/ that person, why do u continue to mention getting over that person. Do you understand my meaning. Anyway, not a bad write. not a bad write @ all. well, I g2g. peace-
    | Posted on 2007-08-26 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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