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    dots Submission Name: laiddots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    feeling lost , unsure of where my feet will fall
    seems almost silly that it's cured by your call
    i dont know what to do when all i want is to be close
    i should have taken little but ive seemed to overdose

    i have all the words but suddenly their gone
    your voice floods me till all i have is drawn
    hoping you'll understand the words i never said
    worrying afterward that you didnt end up misled

    i know your sick game but still i play along
    this feels so right but we both know it's wrong
    i cant tell you what we'll be by the end of this charade
    single together heart broken or maybe just laid




    Submitted on 2007-08-21 19:55:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "i dont know what to do when all i want is to be close
    i should have taken little but ive seemed to overdose"

    I love that. I can't believe no one's comment on this. It's awesome.

    I know what you mean. I relate more than I want to, and I really like the way you said it.

    Oh, and the last two lines... Perfect!!

    What else can I say?

    Very nicely done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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