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    dots Submission Name: Work in Progress 8/22/2007dots

    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       Not really serious about this one, just wanted to write SOMETHING, as it has been so long since I've done so. I've expressed this before but, it seems that without that shroud of depression I am unable to write...to really write. Anyway, what are your thoughts?

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    dotsWork in Progress 8/22/2007dots

    Be there mystery yet
    In our love
    Which seems at once
    both old and new
    As if we two have been together
    many years or only days

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      i don't see depression in this at all...

    i see a new love, being with someone we just met...but spending lots of time with that person and feeling like we've know him or her for a very long time...it is just like that with some people...

    immediate trust---soon to be love...a comfortableness to go along with the passion...

    it's all there in the package...and there is still mystery...getting to know one another...

    takes time but it happens so naturally.

    | Posted on 2012-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds like you use depression, like I use Ginsing. You only think you need it. You can find something else to inspire your writing.
    Change your mind, change your mood, change your location. Wake up your inner poet. Or just read my poem called *I'm tired* I hope it helps.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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