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    dots Submission Name: The Truth About Heartbeatsdots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
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       Got my updates on how Elli's doing. I've been in a down mood since then so I felt like writing this.

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    dotsThe Truth About Heartbeatsdots

    Now they'll lay me down to sleep

    On the cardboard mattress and paper-thin sheets

    The lights above me flicker restlessly

    On and off....Off and on...

    In the distance I can hear footsteps approaching

    But I know that this place is silent

    Alive only with dead silence; Irony

    The imagined footsteps are aligned

    With each decending peak on the monitor next to me

    They're not getting closer, just louder

    And in a sense, more distant

    Each of my heartbeats are mile markers

    Counting how far away I'll be taken away from you

    Each of my heartbeats are the clicks of piano keys

    Playing out my last piece I wrote for you

    Each of my heartbeats are each one of the snowflakes

    That we danced around in together so long ago

    Each heartbeat stands for each memory

    That has run through my head

    I'm trying to remember all of them

    For I don't think I'll be making anymore new ones

    My heartbeats are getting louder

    The red cross painted on the large window

    Is flickering out of focus along with the lights

    And the green lines jumping to my right

    Until the clicks, beeping, and buzzing are all one

    One melancholy requiem that I'm sending out to you

    Each one of my heartbeats are all of the days

    That I wish I could have stayed with you

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