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    dots Submission Name: Category 4 (Its coming now I see)dots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 307
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Nature
    Total Views: 658
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    Description:
       I wrote this in the middle of Hurricane Dean which devastated the central Caribbean as well as moving towards the Yucatan Peninsula, HOpe y'all like it


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    dotsCategory 4 (Its coming now I see)dots
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    Verse 1

    There's something in the sky tonight,
    The city's dark cuz there's no light.
    I'm feeling scared,
    Something's on its way.
    The night was calm yesterday,
    There it goes water just went away.
    And I'm teling you there's nothing else to say.
    I need to get through this,
    The best thing to do is,
    Hope that tomorrow,
    Will bring a better day.

    Chorus

    It's coming now I see...,
    Uprooting trees....,
    Forcing winds blows,
    Watch the rain pores,
    All around us.
    Tomorrow I will try....,
    Surviving last night....,
    Pick up the phone,
    One last time,
    To call you.
    Here I am,
    In the middle of something new
    Here I am,
    With life or death to choose.

    Verse 2

    As it continues,
    Slowly moving west
    Devastation is its best,
    There was nothing I could do than make it through.
    Simultaneously the rain falls then stop,
    Next the wind takes its toll on rooftops.
    The wind starts howling out a dreadful song to me.
    We need to get through this,
    But one thing I know is,
    Tomorrow when we wake up,
    The sight will take our breath away.

    Chorus

    Bridge

    I try anxiously to open my window.....
    Wanna see whats left of my trees.....
    But I'm just glad that it's all over......
    I'm just glad to see that life is here,
    Life is here.

    It's coming now I see...,
    Uprooting trees....,
    Forcing winds blows,
    Watch the rain pores,
    All around us.
    Tomorrow I will try....,
    Surviving last night....,
    Pick up the phone,
    One last time,
    To call you.

    It's coming now I see...,
    Uprooting trees...,

    Forcing winds blows,
    While the rain pores,
    Around us

    Here I am,
    In the middle of something new
    Here I am,
    With life or death to choose.






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    ||| Comments |||
      Brian, I think this is perfect just the way it is. Very compelling and expertly executed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      The Caribbean is among my favorite places to visit to get away from the cold Michigan winters. For that reason, I always shutter at the thought of the terrible hurricanes you get and hope everyone survives unharmed. I can only imagine the forces you speak about in these lyrics since I've never seen them first-hand.

    These lines particularly spoke to me:
    Here I am,
    In the middle of something new
    (or maybe "with a hurricane driving through" as a suggestion instead?)
    Here I am,
    With life or death to choose.

    I'd love to hear you sing these lyrics! I'll bet you put the fury of the storm into your voice.

    :-) Sharon

    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      i always struggle to comment on lyrics because i can never hear them the way the writer intends them to be heard.

    something in this song of yours feels forced. i cannot pin exactly what it is but it doesnt seem to convey the fear and panic one would expect it to... if you can see a hurricane coming in your direction you would prolly be getting a little worried [unless it was something you were more than used to]

    i think you sound a little jumbled in your presentation of the fact jumping from tomorrow to yesterday to tonight to tomorrow and it kinda left me wondering which day you were talking about when so maybe thats something to be aware of and think about straightening out a little...

    otherwise well done.
    do you write the music too?
    if so what genre would you fit this song into?
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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