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    dots Submission Name: Of College Roommatesdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Because I know they wouldn't understand if I told them, I wrote this about my suite mates and myself and our college together-ness right now.


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    Before we met, there was no tension,
    no questions of forgive, forget,
    No forsaken hopes and loss of trust,
    none, and yet, we were.

    We stand now, together,
    the four of us, once friends,
    and our hearts beat different rhythms
    to different ends.

    Because now as we talk,
    little bothers come up,
    not but once,
    but again and again.

    So where we were close to friendship,
    we no longer are anywhere near,
    we are seperate, individual,
    close and but divided by hate and fear.




    Submitted on 2007-08-22 22:46:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Do not fret my dear Persephone, hope exists everywhere in any time in any situation. What may seem as doom may, infact, be a new beginning. Truth be told, familiarity reveals sides to people we dislike however, it is the dislike and understanding the faults of others that draws in emotion into the very people you thought to dispise. Dealing with troubles brings in understanding, you simply need time. Wise men call it accepting people for who they are, not who thought they were. Friendship is a marriage...wherein troubled times make the love deepen.

    colten
    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      It is said that familiarity breeds contempt. Your piece shows all too clearly that much may have been taken for granted in this situation. Perhaps all is not lost, but the tone of the write seems to indicate otherwise.

    This delivered the sentiment quite effectively.

    | Posted on 2007-08-23 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad at all
    You speak a lot of truth with the few words used in your write
    They say you never truly know someone until you live with them
    Your write proves that point perfectly
    Great Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-08-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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