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    dots Submission Name: Not what I expected to be dots
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    Author: Zai
    ASL Info:    19/m/Snohomish Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.09 - 35/50/45
    Words: 613
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 171
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       Kinda just... started typing in word and ... yeah. A wee bit more religious then I'm used to, but I like it and it rings true with what I believe.


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    Despite my calamity you showed me family
    In the face of my supposed enemy
    I need a remedy, a moment with you
    To see what it is that you need me to do
    Can you be with Mace too?
    Megan, Jake, Tay, Kaila and Kelsie
    Rob, Scott, and Kyle, will they see?
    Help me, through me, help them, with me
    Only you lord can see what I need
    Create a monument for them
    Lovely Teresa together with us
    Give us the strength
    So we know who you are
    To know who we’ve been
    To be what you are
    Under the grace of your hand
    I pray for a mass murder of our hatred and panic
    Relief from an all-consuming greed, I’m frantic
    I need this moment with you, now
    This dismay may play the wrong role today
    But hey, you know what’s best for me
    For us the truth is omniscient
    I do believe you are the answer
    Can you show me the path to you?
    Through them, so I can’t miss
    Or mess up or fuss up a storm among your chosen
    I’m frozen, warm me with their hands
    I pray for those who stand for me and those who stood
    I pray to Tay who needs your help for her mood
    She’s tripped and fallen, stumbled and stalled
    Trying to understand what it’s like to have loved
    Be loved and supported by the pivotal point in our lever
    Let the balance go to her favor, she needs it bad
    And I pray for the trio: Rob Scott and Kyle
    They’ve all been blessed by you so much
    I pray that you keep raining down the blessings
    Of happiness and love, gifts from above
    A covenant of knowledge and understanding
    So these men can bless others as you’ve blessed them
    I pray that your hand will grace Mace
    Keep him inline, ‘cause I can only do so much
    I can only scratch the surface of his rush of energy
    Control his charge to barge into a new discovery of you
    And I pray for Megan and Jake the same
    Their abilities you set apart from anything I could be
    Let them flourish with or without me
    Jake is the best friend a friend can be
    Megan can explain concepts above any sight
    Use these two to release our strengths
    Kaila is confused in her heart and mind
    I pray for her stable ground, unshaken by the earth
    Grant her fluency to be happy with her life
    No matter who or what may cross her path
    I pray for Kelsie what no other deserves
    I pray for endurance unmatched
    But you’re way ahead of me there
    ‘Cause knowing what she’s been through…
    Give her more then she has, help her to you
    Help her help others to help herself
    I pray last for Teresa, for her wisdom
    And charisma is unmatched in my eyes
    Can you let me know of her eyes?
    I pray you aid me, us, in our time of need
    In our time of understanding
    I pray you heal what we bleed
    And we learn from your seed
    I pray you help us in your own little way
    I believe you will help us each in our fray
    You’re not quite who I expected you to be
    You called on me so in your name I pray.
    Amen.




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      you are the most wonderful person i think i have ever met. this truly made me cry. You care so much for other people and think nothing of yourself. You are amazing. Thank you so very much..

    As a writing.. Wonderful job once again. it touched my heart and i believe every reader will understand you more by reading this.

    Its Wonderful

    ~Taylor~
    | Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by EyesOfMight | [ Reply to This ]


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