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Submission Name:
If and Would
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Author:
truthbetold
ASL Info:
20-f
Elite Ratio:
3.4 - 38/45/33
Words:
171
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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If and Would
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If I told you I loved you
what would you say
what would you do
only God will know
Would you say it back
or walk away
and ignore me
like most people do
If I took a bullet for you
would you do the same
or leave me to bleed
out the hole in my chest
If I told you my secret
would you spread it around
or keep it to yourself
and tell me yours
If I said you could trust me
would you believe me
or think I was lying
and never trust me
If I died the next morning
with my heart in my hand
would you get the message
that it's my gift to you
Would you even care
that every night
I would cry till i fell
into peaceless sleep
or am I not good enough
to gain your respect
or the love that you spread
to everyone but me.
Submitted on 2007-08-24 08:03:58
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i really like this poem. it's really good questions to ask someone that you want attention from. really good job.
-Amber-
| Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by
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