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    dots Submission Name: If and Woulddots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    If I told you I loved you
    what would you say
    what would you do
    only God will know

    Would you say it back
    or walk away
    and ignore me
    like most people do

    If I took a bullet for you
    would you do the same
    or leave me to bleed
    out the hole in my chest

    If I told you my secret
    would you spread it around
    or keep it to yourself
    and tell me yours

    If I said you could trust me
    would you believe me
    or think I was lying
    and never trust me

    If I died the next morning
    with my heart in my hand
    would you get the message
    that it's my gift to you

    Would you even care
    that every night
    I would cry till i fell
    into peaceless sleep

    or am I not good enough
    to gain your respect
    or the love that you spread
    to everyone but me.





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      i really like this poem. it's really good questions to ask someone that you want attention from. really good job.
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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