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    dots Submission Name: deaths winddots

    Author: vencix
    ASL Info:    19/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 19/88/66
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       once again another poem redone for school it wasnt changed much but i find it much better this way.

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    dotsdeaths winddots

    As i stand in front of your tomb stone. Thinking of what the life we could of had together. Crying and trying to dry my eyes but i can't because you left me behind. With nothing but a memory. Of what we were as a cold wind starts to blow. I put on my jacket and start to walk home. But even though it is on I am cold. And as the cold seeps into my body and mind. A cold sleep takes hold and as i turn around and look at your grave and head towards it i fall. As deaths arms embrace me and the wind blows i fall into a endless sleep. Never to wake up again. As the cold makes me take my last breath and i flaot away i say you in a light and u take me away.

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      I found myself unable to stop reading this. It's beautifully done. BRAVO!!!
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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