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shows cancelled

Author: EEKS
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its a comp. of tv shows that i LOVED that got cancelled. lameass but fuck it.. i like it anyway.

shows cancelled

Youre never going to help me now
My show is cancelled
and my life is down the drain
and youre done for, but you can keep the alligator
and can you explain it to me this time?
Can you explain it all?

Well youre not gonna save me now
strongest man in the world and
my favorite little flower girl
just ink and cancelled tv
and ive got red hair like you
and youre in the unemplyment line this time

its not like when we were kids
and you were trapped in the box
inside my living room
ive got realer monsters now
and less time for you
but its ok
cause youre GONE
ick ick ick

with your stupid shaped head
I miss you
cause you made me feel
like I wasnt the only loser
and then i lost you
and I didnt have anything left but a golden picture frame
and a little blue hat

fuck it
everything goods gone

Submitted on 2007-08-24 12:18:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh my god, this was so weird.
But I loved it!
How you didn't come out and say what it was but I understood what shows you were talking about.
I understood completely your feelings as I read. And I think that's what's important in a poem. No matter what the subject is. Whether it's about canceled TV shows or abortion.
Great poem! I enjoyed it so much.
| Posted on 2007-08-25 00:00:00 | by doppelganger | [ Reply to This ]

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