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    dots Submission Name: You are wonderfuldots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 304



    Description:
       some silly little peice of my mind
    say what you may
    I LIKE MY MIND!!!


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    dotsYou are wonderfuldots
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    you are my wonderful
    I wish each day I could wake your face
    if my wish came true
    Id probably cry
    Oh I am not sad lover
    I am happy
    You make all my wishes come true
    fullfill this one?
    I swear Ill love you forever
    When I say 'I do'




    Submitted on 2007-08-24 15:33:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem only I think that I would have
    made your second line into lines 2 and 3.
    I think I would have writtin it like this:

    I wish each day
    I could wake your face.

    That is the only change I'd make.
    and with that
    I still wish my work
    was as good.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      As Ron says few words that have a lot to say, i really like this writing, and well that feeling is very good, that reminds me when i am with my girl, but to be honest, it doesnt happen anymore
    so keep writing, and have a nice day
    and if you have time please take a look to my writings,
    peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad at all
    You captured a lot of emotion in the few short words used
    If this write had any flaw Iwould say it ended to quickly
    Maybe add a little more to it if you want
    But I stress this is your write
    I would never tell someone how to write a write
    Excellent Work
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-08-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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