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    dots Submission Name: Shadow-Kissed Lovedots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this poem is something i wrote after i read a book called vampire acadamy and basically what shadow kissed means is that you have had something happen to you that should have killed you but somehow you survived

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    dotsShadow-Kissed Lovedots

    ¢¾Shadow-Kissed Love¢¾
    I've seen the brink of death
    ~i've stood along its' edge
    I've gazed into that darkness
    ~and wanted to jump off of that ledge

    But your love has kept me grounded
    ~your love has kept me sane
    It helps to calm the racing thoughts
    ~that fly about my brain

    Your love surrounds my being
    ~pulls me tight into its' folds
    Your arms open and embrace me
    ~within your grasp i'm whole

    But now that you have saved me
    ~helped me back from along the edge
    I'm bound to you forever
    ~for without out shadow-kissed love
    I would surely be dead.

    Submitted on 2007-08-25 12:12:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awe, I liked this one. It was cute.
    So is this like a unrequited hidden love.
    There was nothing that I see was wrong.
    Maybe the part:

    "I've seen the brink of death
    ~i've stood along its' edge
    I've gazed into that darkness
    ~and wanted to jump off of that ledge"

    Instead it could be like this:

    "I've seen the cliff of death
    ~i've stood along its' edge
    I've gazed into the darkness
    ~and wanted to be dead"

    Well not like that, that's just an example. Just saying keep with the theme of the stanza. Like edge as in cliff. So the darkness doesn't exactly make sense. Good job.
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]

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