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    dots Submission Name: Just You and Me Adventuredots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 653
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    Bytes: 1728



    Description:
       LOL, I was listening to "LIPS" by Megamasso
    and I had to make some happy lyrics. Yeah, enjoy. =]


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    dotsJust You and Me Adventuredots
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    The sun shines high
    and it's time to leave
    another adventure just you and me

    Lost in the fields
    of tall grass trees
    I search for you

    This is another best day of my life
    searching through the tall grass
    I search for you
    and also wonder
    what you feel for me

    I can hear you laughing, calling my name
    This makes me love you more
    I smile bright running through the fields
    Even though I can't see you I know you'll always be by my side

    And when the sun embraces the earth
    that is when I found you
    on the floor taking a nap
    I sit down beside you
    and think of us
    all through the years

    Why am I having these feelings for you
    we were only just friends
    only just friends
    but I don't mind
    I always thought this might happen
    I always knew this would happen

    Could you feel the same way for me
    Even though I'm not your 'type'
    I lean down right next to your face
    and our lips meet

    You opened your arms to me
    and hugged me tight
    I couldn't let go until you were finnished
    my breathe sharp

    I start running
    my heart filled with hope and dread
    my feet won't restrain
    and you are behind me
    trying to stop me, you push me
    and I fall to the floor

    That's when you laugh
    And I knew you were joking
    but then you came closer
    and I knew you weren't

    Just you and me
    another adventure just you and me




    Submitted on 2007-08-26 03:13:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm so greatful to you...a happy song in the msit of all the darkness and pain. Well, tis not all happy, but mostly is. The poem flowed nicely and made me happy.
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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