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    dots Submission Name: open ur eyesdots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsopen ur eyesdots
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    cant you hear
    her silent screaming
    the scarlett marks
    she trys so hard to hide
    the tears
    she wipes away befour you can see
    havent you ever noticed
    the way she looks at you
    she loves you more than life itself
    but your blind to it all
    arent you....
    open your eyes and realy see her
    look deep into her eyes
    look into her heart
    she feels as though she's nothing without you
    all she wants is to be in your arms
    but all you seem to do is hide from her
    why arent you there
    holding her up
    when all she can do is fall
    unable to make it on her own
    all she wants is you
    a chance to make all her dreams come true




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      in this write you seem to be longing for the one that will be there for you no matter what and the person you are in love with doesn't seem to notice you but you are trying to show them you care the best way you can i understand where you are coming from because i feel the same way about my ex-girlfriend but im not going to get into that nice write and keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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